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  lovebitten

  9 years ago

  Like you suggest it does sound a bit brusque! I would soften it a little. Everything else (pictures, text) is clear and straightforward and overall you've done a pretty good job! Lovebitten xox - Posted from rhpmobile

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  AnnieWhichway

  9 years ago

  Find the first paragraph a bit negative and grinding. No one likes game players and time wasters. And we can state that. Thing is, the game players and timewasters don't realise they are. So it's a wasted sentence and starts your profile in the negative. If you really want to say it, put it last. The bit about NSA grinds a few off too. Overall your profile is good. Annie

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  sweetgem

  9 years ago

  Someone to receive a flirt from you TheMak115, I would say no for several reasons, but one of the obvious is the wording of your written content. Sure that you didn't use the text language in your profile, but the way you structured some of the lines/paragraphs is off putting. For example, you can just simply say that you're not in interested in meeting attached women and full stop, instead of saying "not interested in attached women seeking extra-curricula activities". Nobody likes to be told that they are cheaters or cheating in their relationship. Do we really need to do that, is my question :-) Therefore, rewording that paragraph, as well as what Annie and summer suggested, would help you advertise your profile better. Words are very powerful tool and because we cannot hear the tone in the spoken words right away, we will interpret words differently in cyber tone :-) That's my 2c and I do not speak on behalf of anyone :-) - Posted from rhpmobile

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  RHP User

  9 years ago

  Be yourself. Youre a 'woomba boy, they breed 'em tough out there! If you feel you have come across as too "brusque", then tone it down. If you put a negative in, then finish with a positive. Eg, Im not looking for attached ladies as I would like to meet with new friends socially. Thats only if thats your reason though. Dont bullshit and you will attract the right people. And dont write what you think they want to hear, people work it out in the first few messages. All the best 'woomba

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  RHP User

  9 years ago

  Your profile is great like the fact that no bullshit is you and you say it how it is Cheers to you

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  PurePeony

  9 years ago

  Your profile is succinct and to the point. You do lay your cards on the table, no doubts about that! You come across as very frank, very honest, but also very emotionally unavailable. Different strokes for different folks - I suppose that there will be other emotionally unavailable ladies out there who are also after NSA sex and fun and hopefully, your paths will converge. Willowtree is right - it does seem brusque.

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